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    dots Submission Name: The Thirsty Crowdots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Found one of my old poems - Was about 12 then. Wrote a similar one in our local language too. Edited the order of two stanzas (2008)


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    dotsThe Thirsty Crowdots
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    Did you know that long ago there lived a very thirsty crow
    He looked high and low, here and there but found just dry land everywhere.

    Why there was no water all over the land,
    The thristy crow could not understand.

    At last came the day he would always recall
    When he found some water, but in a jar so tall.

    He tried to reach the water again and again
    But all efforts with his beak went in vain.

    He piled some stones and to his great surprise
    The water level began to rise.

    One by one the stones he'd drop
    Till the water level reached the top.

    He drank and drank till he could drink no more
    Well, hard work always pays, you know?




    Submitted on 2008-07-06 08:10:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool, i remember reading that riddle, nice makeing a poem from it.
    | Posted on 2010-02-09 00:00:00 | by zercool13 | [ Reply to This ]
      What an inspirational look at achieving through hard work and determination! A drink of water will never be the same again. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      well...this is like me commenting on my own page again....yet.....for all those who come here and wonder why I've posted a message to nicodemous on this page....I did that accidently and remember having deleted it thereafter, very well....but for some reason, it's popped up back here...and can't be deleted now!
    | Posted on 2008-07-12 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks, Nicodemous for your kind and thoughtful comments on my poem "Thirsty Crow"..

    ...My mom says that I had written it when I was still younger( so I must correct the description of the poem )...unfortunately we did not record it and so, some stanzas are missing ..as this is all of it that I can recall................I'm glad that u liked it, anyway.

    I'll sure check out sum of your poetry...but when i get the time.....i havea pretty busy schedule & spend little time on this site.
    Have a good day : )
    | Posted on 2008-07-07 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an amazing philosophical story to have been written when one was just 12! You have talent galore, Megan, and this was a delightful read!

    I absolutely love the title!
    | Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty cool for only being 12. It is a bit juvenile but show a lot of promise. I could easily imagine this (with a little polishing and tweaking) in a children's book.

    I have to say though talk about it as if it were so old. By my math it is only 2 years old. I have many poems (and some of my better works I might add) that are about as old as you if not a little older. But I am not so old I don't remember how long a year was when I was a teen. Once you hit like 20ish time no longer stands still, but races past you.
    | Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]


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