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    dots Submission Name: A lone soldierdots

    Author: Rainmaker
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 45/50/19
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       This is something I found on a memo, which had been written over a year ago. So not much to describe - except i really don't know why the heck there is the last part... Well anyways i hope someone will like it.
    Also I will hopefully get some nice feedback on how to make some progress into it from You. Thank you in advance.

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    dotsA lone soldierdots

    Clouds are moving
    Rain is on it's way
    Thunder 'n' lightning
    Cracking the sky

    There is light beyond
    The hope for sun
    In a circle we stare
    Nature leashes flare
    Of anger and sadness
    Towards human madness

    Machinery marching
    'Gainst the order
    Chaos is coming
    A lone soldier

    Submitted on 2008-07-06 17:46:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi there form afar and yet so near.
    Love this short poem. Reminds me of my Army days 26 years of it. I appreciate the loneliness of a soldier at arms with battle raging all around. Chaos - the senselessness of it. Yes - the madness of it. Still the other guy opposite you may share your own uselessness but confront we will and who will survive?
    A lone soldier who found the Light behind the Sun the Son. Will comment more - later. Regards, Joachim.
    | Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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