I really enjoyed this, especially the rhythm & like it's just being said how it is. It'd be great read aloud. It has a message that everyone will be able to take something from & I like that it's strong, standing up for itself. I don't think there's much more I can say beyond that. It's an effective & direct read that was a pleasure to encounter.
Mmmm....I like it. I can't even put my finger on what I like best about it. It just reminds me of talking with friends about Christ, about what a difference He has made in my life. People see the difference in my life and are curious, but so many false beliefs and empty promises are made in our world today, that skepticism has become the society standard. But we are all frightened of not only falsehood, but also of the truth.
I love the way you paint the picture of the struggling person. I can picture them, the internal battle portrayed by their "nervous swaying." I'm not sure if square-backed soul is the name of the group, or just the title you chose, but I think it perfectly describes the one who struggles with the message. We want things in a box, a nice square that doesn't allow for such ideas as unconditional love and undeserving grace and mercy. It depicts the attitude that keeps the soul from accepting that love, the pride that declares we need help from no one, not even God, that we are good enough on our own. But underneath the square shell we know we are not good enough on our own, and so the battle rages.
Maybe I've totally read into this. But the message of it grabbed me...I'll be honest: I'm a flaming, unabashedly sold-out Christian. And your square-backed soul is the description of those I most desire to reach with His love. Well done my friend. I'd enjoy discussing this with you further.