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    Author: essence of life
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    The truth is i'm lieing to myself.

    I'm afraid. You see the me i wanna banish.
    With him he holds my lies and he holds me.

    I wish to change but it's become to hard because i realize now i need him.

    To allow my memories to comeback scares me but not being the real me is to hard.

    I can't live with out the banished me i chose me over living afraid.




    Submitted on 2008-07-06 21:48:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I went through and corrected spelling and grammer mistakes. I also added a word I thought added a little more sense. You can take my advice or leave it...

    "The truth is I'm lying to myself.
    I'm afraid. You see the me I wanna banish.
    With him, he holds my lies and he holds me.
    I wish to change but, it's become too hard; because I realize now I need him.
    To allow my memories to come back, scares me. But not being the real me is too hard.
    I can't live without the banished me
    [So] I chose me over living afraid."

    Overall, the meaning behind the poem is beautiful. I'm glad you chose to be yourself...

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      its great!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    keep writing!!!!!
    lol!!!!!!!!!
    pm me if u want 2 talk (jk)!!!!
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    P.S!!!! UR CHILDISH!!!
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by narutorules17 | [ Reply to This ]


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