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    dots Submission Name: Inside You'll Knowdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsInside You'll Knowdots
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    I can feel you when you're near
    I hear the cries you have inside
    Things are shifting towards our fear
    You'll be leaving and here I reside

    You could still stay, you know I want you to
    It's hard to breathe, I gasp hard for air
    I know you're gone, nothing I can do
    I feel less alive, I'm empty while you're there

    I hope it hurts when you think of me
    Every night you'll see me in your head
    Everywhere you go you know I'll be
    It's cold without me in your new bed

    And every time you're with him I'll cross your mind
    You'll never have a day I won't grow inside
    Swallow your pride, let it cave, and then you'll find
    You'll want our life to return, give it time

    Until that day go easy on me
    The pain engulfs me whole
    Don't make me your enemy
    Risk losing the life he stole





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