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Ocean's Dream


Author: BleedingTears
ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418 /289 /62
Words: 187
Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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Description:


A song that sounds better being sung.


Ocean's Dream



When you sleep, you call out my name.
Oh, how you're a fool, playing my game.
And now the ocean's tides are rising.
And all the beach's sand stays beside me.

Doesn't matter how deep.
Or how your bones blow away.
The sun is staying down tonight.
The moon is here to stay.

It's not like the wind blows blue,
Remaining and staining you.
It's not like we're after you,
We just want to hold onto you.
The storm is stronger than it seems,
Knowing what it can take from me.

When you breathe, you're inhaling me.
You close your eyes to disguise me.
I think it's time that we rest now.
We must prepare for the breakdown.

That tomorrow will bring
As a way to remind me
You're gone with the waves
Sailing away from me.


It's not like the wind blows blue,
Remaining and staining you.
It's not like we're after you,
We just want to hold onto you.
The storm is stronger than it seems,
Knowing what it can take from me.
Knowing that it's an ocean's dream.




Submitted on 2008-07-07 08:03:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is dreamy and poignant poetry and I can just imagine how it must sound as a song... My fav line is:

"It's not like the wind blows blue"

It's a catchy line and brings a wistfulness to the poem. Well written!
| Posted on 2008-07-07 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]


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