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    dots Submission Name: your turn dots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 417/433/131
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsyour turn dots
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    I pull my skin down for you

    that's the whole point of all this for me

    now it is your turn but you say

    it was all daydreams

    if you don't know what I mean

    maybe I'm wrong

    but already

    we both know

    I'm never wrong




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      Women are more willing to pull down their skins while men not so much. This seems to set up a tension between them. Women always probing, men always defending. Their must be some value to that state of things if it is universal and not just learned. It does seem right that lovers should pull down their skins.
    | Posted on 2009-12-29 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Some women think it's nasty when a man can pull his skin down, and rather cut it off at birth. I doubt they listen to the gurgling and screaming, I wouldn't, but only because I'd fear to lose another part of my humanity. For true men change the world and not let the world change them, and only true men can be broken for resisting to be molded by their peers, and we all feel the shame of giving in.
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by machine dream | [ Reply to This ]
      the tone here speaks of personal confidence, and a question which asks "here i am revealing myself; why can't you do so as well?", and the inevitable clash which arises when it isn't reciprocated.

    sharply edged.
    | Posted on 2008-07-12 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]
      haha! i love it.
    | Posted on 2008-07-07 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]


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