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    dots Submission Name: Promisesdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       a little love poem


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    dotsPromisesdots
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    You have promised that our love
    Will be always happy
    And last forever

    You have said this sincerely
    Through words from your lips
    That came from your heart

    I have wished us long lives
    And eternity thereafter
    To share your promise together

    May the gods of love grant
    That these promises
    Will always be true





    Submitted on 2008-07-07 16:48:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is short and sweet. Why is it Your promise? It sounds more one sided- not a joint affair which, I would think, a love together should be. Your "wish" makes it sound less uplifting and promising than a stronger word choice.
    | Posted on 2009-08-01 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      you are standing well with this poem. you show honor in your writing. keep up the good work. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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