Really loved the metaphor used - I would just bring in closer descriptions to the elements named, like the sun and the hills. I'm looking for that thing that makes me want to abide in your garden... Also the rhyming is inconsistent - the beginning doesn't have a set pattern but the 2nd half does - I'm not sure what rythm to apply?
"that in this garden is my heart and forever my soul mate
so theres such few words left for me to say
that you have chosen me, for this reason i love u today." - I love the simplicity in the ending of the poem - so very honest and real.
I think that you have a good start on this poem, but there are several things that I would change. For one, you should make sure that basic things like spelling and punctuation are correct. In poetry you can break these rules, but it's best to be consistent in your rule-breaking. If you have some punctuation, it's best to have the whole thing be punctuated. If you have some capitalization, it's best for all the starts of sentences to be capitalized. Also, basic things like apostrophes should be used. If you keep consistency in mind, your poem should be better accepted.
Also, you should probably come up with a pattern for your rhyming. It seems that in three of the five stanzas have the last two lines rhyme. I would continue that pattern to the other stanzas. And, remember, you don't have to have anything rhyme at all. It's great when you're able to use rhyming to enhance your poem, but all poems don't have to rhyme.
I do like some of your imagery though. The phrase "caressed by your flowers" is a nice twist, make the garden seem more alive and more like a person.