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    dots Submission Name: Forgottendots
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    Author: vedanta19
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    dotsForgottendots
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    They whisper songs of yesterday,

    smiling a while, wondering later

    liked tired souls on a lost island

    awaiting warm bath of lavendar and lemon;



    Amidst that waiting,

    pulse grasping leftover breaths,

    a dew-kissed pathway, expecting strangers next morn,

    like madonna dancing in love-cushioned moon-night;



    a candle at the window -

    flicker, then rest, later lose faith

    on wind,

    so much like a romeo

    under that jinxed balcony,

    an irony that is life -

    he probably would exclaim

    will he?!


    the sonnets go missing,

    as summer sun in a autumn -

    like unfaithful lover

    on passion-kissed night,

    forgotten -
    as a dead poet

    so forgotten!

    (*written for the poet Sara Teasdale)





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