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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Hiding and seeking,
    whispering and scheming,
    frightened with a touch of wind,
    our little cheeks,
    almost turning hot red,

    Did I tell you?
    that old tree is no more.

    Listening and wondering,
    Promising and imagining,
    Those unending tales, midnight snacks,
    The setting sun, twinkling stars,

    How are you?
    We are under such different skies.

    Waiting and praying,
    hoping and trusting,
    the classic saga of love,

    I am still in love.
    What about you?

    Gasping verses, painful memories

    Do you care?




    Submitted on 2008-07-07 22:21:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Reminesces (sp) of the past! Delightful and painful and questioning memories, and wonderment that time stands still for no man! I sense some strong childhood yearning here!

    Nice verse, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2008-10-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that quite a lot. It's very, simple yet it ways it's not. I really like it.

    Good job.
    | Posted on 2008-07-08 00:00:00 | by BestxDeceptions | [ Reply to This ]


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