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    dots Submission Name: Farewell to Tearsdots

    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsFarewell to Tearsdots

    Love's sweet mementos
    of a long-lost time
    scatter rhyme
    upon the grounds of summer.
    Her kiss,
    remembered past its rendered night,
    stills floats a vision---
    and I surrender.

    My fingertips retrace her curves;
    within my mind, I do observe
    her flowing hair
    and perfect smile---
    returning there to bask awhile.

    Though passion's notes
    on moistened lips once hummed,
    love succumbed
    to summer's drought drawn withered.
    A torn and shattered man
    remained to write
    of autumn's leaves
    and love blown far from sight.

    My eyes grow swollen, full of tears---
    farewell to summer's yesteryear.
    Fall's leaves break free
    and so will I---
    but not without this sad goodbye.

    Submitted on 2008-07-08 16:39:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy and sad this was. I was roaming this evening looking for something that was just moving. I found it here. Fall's leaves break free
    and so will I---but not without this sad goodbye. Very descriptive and relates well to each line.

    Thank you for your gift sharing.

    Write on!


    | Posted on 2009-04-01 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]
    You did it again my Friend
    This is another write from you that left me with tears falling before it was even finished
    You certainly have a way of tugging ones heart with your words
    Very Sad Yes but Also Very Beautiful
    Looking forward to reading more soon
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2008-08-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written cery well and very beautiful. The imagery was fantastic, the flow was unbroken, it was magnificent! I haven't any thing to nitpick. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-07-09 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Parting is such sweet sorrow, or so they say! This was sad and wonderful! Love is never truly lost, though it may be in its physical form! It lingers forever in memories that form part of the fabric that covers the heart, and keeps it warm in the soul's winters!
    | Posted on 2008-07-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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