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    dots Submission Name: ALL THAT SHALL EVER BEdots
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    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 871
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsALL THAT SHALL EVER BEdots
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    Piercing screams
    from a shattered past
    Bleeding wounds
    that forever last

    Fitful dreams
    and uneasy sleep
    Horror's realm
    full of tears to weep

    Deep regrets
    caught in awful lies
    Buried hopes,
    unrelenting sighs

    Passion dead
    in its stone cold tomb
    Fathered lust
    in a growing womb

    Answers lost
    in a question's plea
    Questions all
    that shall ever be





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      This almost comes across as clues to a riddle...

    That if you can decipher the meaning of each stanza it will unfold in a tragic and ancient secret...

    It took me on a relic hunt through cobweb covered rooms with creaking doors and leather bound books that snap shut with a thud and a layer of dust floating up...

    Beautifully crafted!
    | Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      Sharon
    This write reminded me of just what Ive been missing not visiting your page for so long
    I sincerelly apologize for that
    I have been sick and so has my Mom and little sister
    We are finally feeling better and Life once again shines
    Now back to your write
    As with all your writes this one shines with pure and honest emotion
    You have a Great knack of drawing the reader in with your words to your life or to the subject of your poems life
    This write I found to be very sad and the rhyme scheme was very well done
    To be Honest even though I am male I saw a lot of my own life in this and this brought back memories of a sad and troublesome past that was mine but this also showed me how Grateful I am by coming as far as I have in life and escaping from the pain
    Excellent Job!!!!!!!
    Im making this another favorite from you
    Please keep in touch I Honestly miss talking to you
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Straight to the heart! Love it! Instantly part of it
    | Posted on 2008-08-04 00:00:00 | by lily21 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love minimalistic pieces like this because they are so powerful and thought provoking.

    I had an awful nightmare the other night and even though I can't remember the dream I was filled with an awful feeling all the next day!

    Hope all is well!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. Short, but it got the point I cross. I espeically love it because I can relate. Keep up the fantastic work and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-07-09 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really deep for such a short verse! It is excellent, and touches the myriad of nightmares generated by a past mistake! Heaven help us, we all make them, and they all have their unrelenting consequences!!

    Well done, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-07-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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