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    dots Submission Name: I Know You Hold The Broken Pieces of My Heartdots
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    Author: Jaiknob
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 17/17/10
    Words: 412
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsI Know You Hold The Broken Pieces of My Heartdots
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    Haunting me , night and day
    You penetrate my dreams
    As the devil enters my blood
    Pushing you out of my thoughts
    only results in my tears being pushed away
    Hearing the devil's whispers
    Instead of your voice
    No longer know where to head
    No longer aware which way to turn
    On my knees
    Hands raised to the sky
    Feeling the rain on my skin
    Mixing with my tears
    Unto the Lord I call
    Unto the Lord I cry
    How I long for you!
    How I desire you!
    We were just not meant to be
    Tell me I didn't lose the chance
    But babe, even when you tell it's too late
    I know the devil would not have allowed them to
    let us be together
    They would have had us apart
    They would keep us from each other
    How wrong they are now!
    You're with me all the time
    You haunt me even in my sleep

    I know you feel my waves
    when your fingers twirl in her curls
    I know you see my browns
    when you look into her blues(eyes)
    I know you feel my head on your chest
    when she lays next to you
    I know you wish for me
    when her arms wrap around you
    I know you hear my voice
    when she calls out your name
    Just remember to force yourself to not say my name out loud

    Haunting me, night and day
    Seeing your eyes everywhere in the world
    Praying for you in the midst of the night
    Wishing you were here
    Wishing you were near

    O Love...
    how I desire you!
    O Love...
    She thinks she's got your heart
    I hold on to yours still..................




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    ||| Comments |||
      typical beansy stalker style writing.
    u crazy mashallah.
    u made me think of batfat for a while there.
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      your words are haunting , but it grabs my attention. good job. keep writing. checkout my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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