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    dots Submission Name: I've been rescueddots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 485
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsI've been rescueddots
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    When I was down he came,
    To save my life.
    And now that he is here,
    All through the night.
    But why does my heart still needs,
    A lullaby....,

    That song...,
    He's singing unto me,
    Will set me free.

    He sings again to me,
    Convincing lines.
    He's full of mystery,
    Will I survive?
    But now I understand,
    How he really feels...

    That song...,
    He's singing unto me,
    Will set me free.

    "I cant believe that I've been rescued"
    "I cant believe that I've been rescued"

    I see him in my dreams,
    Though his face is vague...
    A moment so serene,
    The love we make.
    Although its happening,
    Only in my mind...

    That song...,
    He's singing unto me,
    Will set me free.

    "I cant believe that I've been rescued"
    "I cant believe that I've been rescued"

    Oh... oh.... oh.... oh.... oh....,
    Oh... oh.... oh.... oh.... oh....,
    Oh... oh.... oh.... oh.... oh....,
    Oh... oh.... oh.... oh.... oh....,
    Oh.....
    Oh.....
    Oh.....
    Oh oh oh oh....







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      a melody detailed , speaks volumes , thoughts very heartful , intriguing , lively vibration of ones self, great poem, keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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