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    dots Submission Name: Joshuadots
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    Author: sapphyreravyn
    ASL Info:    16/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.45 - 3/15/21
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsJoshuadots
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    He lights this dark tunnel.
    Despair clouds my world,
    But he parts the clouds with a smile.
    He calms me with his words.
    His mere presence,
    Keeps the tension in my mind at bay.
    He is my life.
    Without him there is nothing.
    Cold abyss fills my mind,
    Until he is there with me.
    My friend,
    Joshua.




    Submitted on 2008-07-09 00:00:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      showing your expression is real good. being strong in your words. keep writing. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very nice. I especially like the lines "Despair clouds my world, But he parts the clouds with a smile."

    One change I would make, I guess it's just a typo, would be adding an 's' to fills in the line "Cold abyss fill my mind,"
    | Posted on 2008-07-09 00:00:00 | by chilliboy | [ Reply to This ]



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