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    dots Submission Name: The Ballad of Elaester Bruningdots
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    Author: Sethesin
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 107/143/85
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsThe Ballad of Elaester Bruningdots
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    I’m perched
    The false sun has died
    The lizard writhes
    In its dark hole shedding
    Those hands have left me
    The warm ground fumes still
    In the dark, moonless
    I don’t move, a still rock
    My shell is the weight
    Of my little yellow world
    Away from the wet grass
    & water-side sun




    Submitted on 2008-07-09 05:43:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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