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    dots Submission Name: Appledots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    15/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 10/20/52
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAppledots
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    Endless halls. It is the poison apple that killed me. There lies a body once warm and strong. Now food for wolves.

    Such trickery. I should have suspected. I trusted your words. They lead me to this end. The skin was what choked me. The bitter taste. The flesh was what stopped my heart.

    The look on your face as my eye closed...

    I never truly knew you. Here I sit in these surrounding walls. How we never were apart and you said you loved me from the start.

    When the apple came to me with your warmest wishes I couldn't say no. You stabbed me in the back and left me there to bleed. How I wish I could have seen this coming.
    I never knew how you thought I meant nothing.




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