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Trials and Tribulations

Author: MC white
ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
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Words: 67
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Trials and Tribulations

I'm free
free flowing as the sea
free falling and its gnawing
at the very core of me

I'm interred as if I'm dead
by this slowly seeping dread
but I have and will do nothing
till my whole life I retread

reminisce and ruminate
throw back wide the close-shut gates
of my failure stash
as I come in last
in my lowly life-long race

Submitted on 2008-07-09 18:33:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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