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    dots Submission Name: A Soul With No Homedots
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    Author: Nicholas Lala
    Elite Ratio:    5.63 - 40/28/23
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I know this written like a story, but oh well. I wrote this about a homeless guy who lives outside my building. Really cool guy, just misunderstood and under-appreciated.


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    dotsA Soul With No Homedots
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    A drifter wanders a blackened street.
    Face lit only by a sliver of pale moon,
    And the burning vengeance of a Marlboro.
    Forgotten past, driven by lost dreams,
    A soulless void
    Encompassing fear.
    Faceless to a world gone cold,
    Wandering shadow,
    Like a wolf on the prowl.
    Hunger drives normality
    To the brink of extinction,
    Dangerous only to himself,
    Sanity is a thin line traveled
    Most frequent.
    Creatures stir in the night,
    But none tread louder
    Than the hollow footsteps
    Leaving behind a life,
    Eclipsed by loneliness.
    An inner child screams
    For the validity and whereabouts
    Of it’s Being.
    Fingernails and skin
    Seem to have lost the battle
    Mother Nature waged long ago.
    Only sense of feeling left,
    Is the emptiness inside,
    From the lack of food and purpose,
    Two things people need to survive.
    Lifetimes of stories and wisdom,
    Rotting away without an outlet,
    Like the city of Atlantis;
    Erased from existence.
    Drifting through life
    Waiting for the end,
    Like a stained and ugly snowflake,
    Floating to an inevitable demise.
    Nothing gets noticed,
    Strays seem to stray.
    No company,
    No being,
    Just solitude
    Day after day.
    The only friend is comfort,
    Which happens to be the night.
    Reliable and understanding;
    Free from judgment through disgust.
    If no one sees you,
    Does one exist,
    Or is it a mere delusion
    Of an empty fate?
    Questions with no answers,
    A life without purpose,
    A soul with no home,
    Leaves a drifter,
    Wandering blackened streets.
    Face lit only by a sliver of pale moon,
    And the burning vengeance of a Marlboro.




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      Face lit only by a sliver of pale moon,
    And the burning vengeance of a Marlboro.


    Wonderful, vivid images. I think you very easily captured the haggard feel of someone who has been worn by time and the elements, and isolated far too long. This was a very good piece, excellent even, in parts. There are parts where the lines break in such a way that is seems not to flow as well as it could, and that detracts a little, but other than that, I thought it was wonderful.
    | Posted on 2008-07-27 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an excellent write, full of compassion and feeling! We tend to dehumanize the homeless, and react to them with fear or loathing, rather than compassion and sympathy!

    Your excellent verse may help many to realize that within the homeless person is the heart and soul of a human being!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow is so of emotion I help but say this one hell a poem
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]



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