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    dots Submission Name: If Only More Permanentdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIf Only More Permanentdots

    If only more permanent
    the shower of sparks from the 4th of July rocket
    would look like the silver glitter
    on black construction paper masterpieces
    we made in kindergarden.

    Submitted on 2004-02-07 23:39:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, how I love this thought! Yet again, another great depiction of the simple beauty of life. Made me think of my 5-year-old daughter's wonderful pics posted on the refrigerator.
    | Posted on 2004-02-10 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      well written. almost a bit nostalgic. I always wonder how you can convey so much with so little words. amazing.
    | Posted on 2004-02-08 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww.... Yet another brilliant snapshot in time. I would love to see these short poems of yours published in some sort of anthology. Illustrated. Typical of your work in so many ways, and yet... something about this one is different. . . more... nostalgic I think. For a time before love and hate and all those other messy grown-up emotions. Well done! <><
    | Posted on 2004-02-08 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]

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