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    dots Submission Name: Last Night's Rantdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 609
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       "You can rant it or chant along, like a canticle"
    --Me, AETLP/TC


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    dotsLast Night's Rantdots
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    the while in her eyes,
    is the smile in my heart,
    and i feel hers next to mine,
    even miles apart,
    so it ain't easy, no--
    believe me, when I say that it ain't
    because I can't change: she's red,
    Evened in paint,
    Smooth edges
    corners sweep like a broom and pan,
    she's hot. but stays cool.
    like a room and fan,
    I'm doomed to can and cannots,
    So in my spot,
    so I love the IF/ANDS she drops,
    in my plots,
    no more certainty and straight lines--
    I take mine,
    I give her what's hers,
    and then I even gave mine...
    because she's that possibility,
    In a miles long shot,
    that my heart follows her
    and may never ever stop...




    Submitted on 2008-07-10 17:25:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written fantastically. It was nicely detailed and flowed perfectly. I've been in a similar place, though I was more negitive. Keep up the nice work, and I'll keep reading

    Haely
    | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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