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    dots Submission Name: Abortiondots

    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    When you look into my eyes do you still see a young boy staring back at you
    Or do you see the innocence I gave away and find yourself not knowing what to do
    Iím responsible for this
    I canít rid myself of my selfishness
    It haunts me every dayÖ

    What makes you scream at night
    Waking up to another site
    Of what you did when you killed the kid
    Every word you said plays in your mind

    Itís too late to take it back
    Itís too late, you canít go back
    Itís too late to take it back
    Itís too late, you canít go back


    When you woke up to another day
    Why was it so hard to find the words to say
    To tell someone of whatíd youíd done
    When you took someoneís life away
    I know the reason for your tears
    I know what it is you fear
    In the mirror, I see you hiding that youíre crying
    But to me, the reason is clear

    Itís too late to take it back
    Itís too late, you canít go back
    Itís too late to take it back
    Itís too late, you canít go back


    I could join you
    I could see you today
    I could join you
    I could give it all away


    I want to show you what I wanted for you
    I want to give you all of my love and say
    Iím sorry for the things that I did to you
    Iím sorry that I took your life away

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      mmmm.... i don't know about this one


    | Posted on 2010-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I know what you meant when you mentioned it being a little graphic, but I think it gave this piece a nice touch. It really gave off your messege and meaning.
    | Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It was very touching and deep and with the picture a little sickening. I'm rendered quite speechless with this. Nice job. Keep up the nice work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-07-10 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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