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    dots Submission Name: your invisible creaturesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsyour invisible creaturesdots
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    would you more likely
    be consumed by a python
    or my eyes?
    because i devour
    your invisible creatures
    with my mind
    each night.

    you
    who go on loving
    despite the science
    of the heart
    that holds no true spirit
    like the secret brain.

    i've known you,
    stolen by the ocean
    that i am.
    & i've seen you swallowed
    by the trough
    of arctic waters
    in your veins.

    could you release
    the bluish wet
    of your enamor
    inside me.
    or i,
    inside you,
    with my milky cobra
    twilight forever.

    i stutter
    into a new day alone.
    each syllable
    is a new way to describe you.
    careful not to move
    anywhere
    that could ignite
    your passion,
    i float in...




    Submitted on 2008-07-10 22:19:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ooohh... I like this a lot. I love your animalistic descriptions. They lend a... rawness and power to the piece. Very nice indeed!

    --
    "i've known you,
    stolen by the ocean
    that i am.
    & i've seen you swallowed
    by the trough
    of arctic waters
    in your veins."
    --

    This was my favourite stanza. Just wonderful.

    Cheers,

    ~Mandi~
    | Posted on 2008-07-14 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]


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