Description: I'm sure there are a million and one spelling errors but my window looks funny for some reason and I cant really tell...
I Remember the Girl -------------------------------------------
I remember the girl
Who loved dinosaurs
Who wanted to know
Everything about them
She as so innocent
A precious little blonde
Running around, playing
My best friend
The girl she has become
Is a stranger to me
Through we grew together
Never a minute apart
She skips school all the time
Smokes pot in crazy quantities
Doesn't care about her future
All she wants todo is party
I remember the little girl
Who wanted to be an archeologist
Traveling the world
Seeing the beauty
Learning the past
Her dreams were simple
And within her grasp
But for some reason
She quit reaching
She said she's fine
With being the girl
Who strips for money
To party at the bar
Her attitude is If I don't care
Why should you?
I love you, that's why
I remember the girl
Who had goals
Who wanted to be something
To be someone
Now that girl
Wants nothing more
Than to be the women
She wasn't meant to be
Agh. I know how that feels. That girl in my life wanted to be a musician. Now she doesn't know a guitar from a joint, not to mention she doesn't actually recognize/acknowledge me in the halls anymore. It really sucks.
So anyway, if you're planning on editing this, my only suggestion is that you be less literal. For example
"The girl she has become
Is a stranger to me
Through we grew together
Never a minute apart
She skips school all the time
Smokes pot in crazy quantities
Doesn't care about her future
All she wants todo is party"
this whole stanza is very straightforward. Maybe instead, you could talk more about what she did as a little girl, and more vividly about what she does now. Don't make things so obvious.
Submission Name: I Remember the Girl
