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    dots Submission Name: On A Walk By The Seadots
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    Author: realpoet
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    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsOn A Walk By The Seadots
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    while walking on the shore
    with sand between my toes,
    I heard the waves talk and talk
    wondering why on the shore I did walk.

    They tried to chase me from their realm
    advancing closer to my stride
    with voices of incessant roar
    as sand from beneath my feet they tore.

    Determined was I to enjoy my walk
    as deeper I went into the tide
    but Neptune thought it sacrilege
    and hit me with a wave's sideward seize.

    Downward into the sand I laid
    as he pounced me into the shore,
    he salted my eyes with his brine
    as his fingers pulled me to his recline.

    Wresting myself from his embrace
    I ran a bit to higher sand
    believing not be wanted me to love:
    I walked along and found a glove.

    A glove, a glove the sand tried to hide,
    Did he kill someone I loved ?
    "No,no,no," the whispered wind said,
    "He has been centuries dead."

    It was then I began again
    my love of walking on the shore
    as morning kissed the waves that bore
    their findings laid upon the sand.

    I walked amongst this treasure find
    and listened to the murmur of the sea's
    eternal talk and washing of the sand:
    ah, this sight and feel is moment grand.




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