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    dots Submission Name: Your Hello said Goodbyedots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 800/427/261
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    dotsYour Hello said Goodbyedots
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    CHORUS:

    I didn't know that love
    is a circus ring;
    You said, "Hello" then said,"Goodbye."
    I can't believe that love
    is a circus ring.

    VERSE;

    Our love I thought was strong,
    strong to fight against all wrong,
    but you came home one night
    and slammed the door.
    You said,"I can't take it anymmore!"

    You took off your ring
    and packed your clothes.
    No tear in your eye,
    no runny nose.
    You called someone I didn't know,
    then walked out on me
    like a so-and-so.

    (CHORUS)

    VERSE:
    I'll look for you
    through the window pane,
    my heart will long for you
    through its pain.
    I'll wait for you to say, "Hello"
    with no good-byes
    in the here below.

    (CHORUS)

    (REPEAT LAST VERSE)





    Submitted on 2008-07-11 03:03:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Excellent Job
    For some reason maybe it was the Hello and Goodbye part this write song immediately drew me to The Beatles
    Believe me my Friend I know through experience how hard it is to write lyrics
    It took me a very long time to finally get that art down
    This flows well and the sylable count seems perfect as I immediately was able to place a beat in my head
    Great Job!!!
    It is really a Pleasure reading your writes as I get a feeling of happiness a desire to move forward reading your words
    Thats a gift my Friend and you got it!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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