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    dots Submission Name: Untitled 12dots

    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    No storm nor snow will shatter this purest infatuation
    I wished, I wished the calmest through
    The quietest rage in attempt and virtues beyond all grace
    Letting you succumb before my humble,honest fascination uncorrupted with lust
    Only hope and guardian's prayer for your safety

    Rough edges of these hills only leaving bruise on my skin
    Yet never will be compared by the stare you left in my eyes as a mark of promise
    Unstated oath of a homecoming
    Sentences may not define my cryptic passion towards this masterpiece of nature
    Our bonds may never be broken even by the slightest crack
    Therefore i shall seek truth for you to keep as a reminder that i shall be back.

    Submitted on 2008-07-11 10:19:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. That literally gave me goosebumps. It was just so strong and sure of a homecoming and the love. It just feels so pure and powerful.
    :) That might not make sense, but, I dont even know how to put it in words I guess. I just cant believe that it brought goosebumps.

    I absolutley love this part:
    "Our bonds may never be broken even by the slightest crack
    Therefore i shall seek truth for you to keep as a reminder that i shall be back."

    Amazing write!

    | Posted on 2008-07-12 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]

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