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    dots Submission Name: Deceived to have and to bedots

    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    27/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 119/106/24
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Rant/You left me
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       this was written in response to the person that i care for. just to let that person know that i was truthful all along. But will not be content with something less than true love, specially not just to feel secure about the future.

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    dotsDeceived to have and to bedots

    Why ask for that which you would not be willing to offer?
    Asking to be a queen, just to make a king suffer.
    Because to his queen he is no king at all.
    Just a mere servant she causes to stumble and fall.

    Why would a man drink from a cup that is not his?
    Yet when he drinks his own, its poisoned by she in which he believes
    You speak of living through suffering, lies, abuse and pain.
    But in your heart there was nothing to give and nothing to gain

    Also infidelity you say was his charge?
    Knowing that it was in your heart all along from the start.
    The truth does come out and its easy to see,
    That compared to others the 2nd place is all he can ever be.

    How can a man reach a goal that does not exist?
    To be honored and most precious one, he was so deceived
    To think of himself as his loved ones most precious gift,
    The desire taken from him, with swift and resentful lips.

    Submitted on 2008-07-11 11:38:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has a very classic, even medieval quality to it with the king and queen thing going. The cup reference is classic also, dating back to Jesus' use of the drink of this cup metaphor. I use that old feel in some of my own work. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2011-12-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know if without your description that I would pick up that a part of the story is- you were truthful all along.
    I did get the feelings of pain, contempt, of not receiving (back) what you thought you should in the relationship.
    | Posted on 2010-02-27 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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