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    dots Submission Name: The Amber Glassdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1042/1118/535
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Amber Glassdots
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    My spells into an amber glass
    I pour as winter brings the cold,
    On starless nights gray cloud heads pass
    Above my onion dome of gold,
    While I the key to magics hold.

    Too quickly summer did forsake
    These angry hills, my castle’s walls
    Hard by the deep and frozen lake,
    At dawn my vanished lover calls
    Once more my heart to pierce and break.

    As winter shrouds the warming sun
    I conjure spells, a magic jewel
    Whose touch can bring oblivion,
    Purloined from a mendacious ghoul,
    Marked in The Key of Solomon!

    I seem a ship bound for a reef
    In storms gigantic and profane.
    I hold my sorrows now in fief
    Like wheat before a hurricane,
    A storm of black stupendous grief.

    My spells into an amber glass
    I pour as winter storms without,
    My heart is like to polished brass
    Within my high walled gray redoubt,
    And pray that this… this, too, may pass!




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      A vision seen through a glass, darkly! How often I have mused staring into the beconing and inviting bore of a half filled glass! Summer forsakes us all too soon, and the glass hearkens dark and forboding prophesies, more often in winter than perhaps than gleeful images of frolicking in the sunshine (hopefully with a sparsely clad nymph)! Excellent brooding tale, my talented friend in letters!

    Just absolutely excellent! The title is fantastic!
    | Posted on 2008-07-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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