Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: A Beautiful Daydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/806/391
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Nature
    Total Views: 505
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1402



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsA Beautiful Daydots
    -------------------------------------------


    The sun is warm and its nice outside
    The children laughing passing by
    The woman in the corner laughs
    She meets her lover from the past
    As I say

    (Chorus)
    Beautiful day
    It is
    A beautiful day

    Beautiful way
    It is
    A beautiful way
    To wake up, wake up, wake up this morning

    Beautiful day
    Beautiful way
    It is

    Hanging in the corner with my friends
    Lots to talk about
    Never ends
    Ice cream truck just passed along
    Singing that mesmeric ice cream song

    (Chorus)
    Beautiful day
    It is
    A beautiful day

    Beautiful way
    It is
    A beautiful way
    To wake up, wake up, wake up this morning

    Beautiful day
    Beautiful way
    It is

    (Bridge)
    The sun shining, shining down on me
    Lovely weather, lovely weather just for me
    Enough to ride to the lake
    Beautiful day only God could make

    (Chorus)
    Beautiful day
    It is
    A beautiful day

    Beautiful way
    It is
    A beautiful way
    To wake up, wake up, wake up this morning

    Beautiful day
    Beautiful way
    It is

    Beautiful day
    Beautiful way
    It is 2xs




    Submitted on 2008-07-11 17:33:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah it's really beautiful day i liked it and i just look forward to hear it someday.
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    163579

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Your Lover written by Cordell
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    prison written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Carry written by saartha
    no words for how graceful you are in this moment written by Daniel Barlow
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    an unashamed poverty written by Daniel Barlow
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Yes written by poetotoe
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Records I written by Raphael
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Cover written by saartha
    a safe place written by Daniel Barlow
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    You read free written by poetotoe

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry