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    dots Submission Name: Human Conditiondots
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    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsHuman Conditiondots
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    We're all the same before the eyes of vengeance
    Only numbers that soon will perish
    An endangered species endangers another species
    We control population through war and destruction

    We're all none other than pestilence
    Epidemically hostile with a contagious death wish
    A wild,pure, raw,and raging power yet vicious
    An abomination yet an intended creation

    A divine purpose,a supposed leader of existence
    Lost in a whirlpool of death,then vanish
    Fallen into a foul way of life,then deceased
    Dealing through judgment day without any objection
    A virtuous being yet lost in sinful world




    Submitted on 2008-07-12 19:29:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      bravo, very well written. you speak with volumes in your words. keep writing. check out my page with your comments
    | Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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