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    Author: fryte
    ASL Info:    32/male/Pomona
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 319/342/88
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 692



    Description:
       a quickie that will be taken down soon. stream of blah.very rough.


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    there is an injustice floating in my beer
    it's catchy and
    there are kids singing along to it
    but my inebriation supercedes
    their keyboard causes

    anyone can become a contestant
    on america's next top president
    inauguration requires only a single vowel

    we live in a one word galaxy
    a pied piper feeding frenzy
    and all the unseen variables
    feel the need to speak to me

    i see dead imagination
    creativity
    spontanaiety
    individuality
    was lost to the next big thing
    that is seen every fifteen seconds

    it's getting lonely in here




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      I get the impression here of the shallowness of being and you and I know it just isn't so. It's as if you're in move and chose to flatten yourself just to appear in the same scenario.

    Were you the floating injustice in the room? I can go to a bar but I can't stay long, unless I'm playing music there, and that seems different.

    There are millions of soul lights that need to be ignited, and this is easily understood. And you're a screaming voice, rascal, leave this one up. And ask the band, if you're going to rant, please do it for a good reason, or it's just noise.

    nanorator
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh heh. Like it. But keep it out there. It's quick but you speak volumes with few words. Hell, just the following lines can provoke hours of conversation:

    anyone can become a contestant
    on america's next top president

    Nicely done my friend. Nicely done.

    !n3pt
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by _n3pt | [ Reply to This ]


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