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    dots Submission Name: Don't Break Medots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDon't Break Medots
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    And when the wind blows through
    This hole in my chest
    When I'm cold, clammy deceased
    Please give it a rest
    Please don't break me

    And when the stars shine bright
    And you know I see them too
    Though I'm hundreds of miles away
    You can sense my thoughts of you
    Please don't break me

    And when the shells sing tunes
    Under every wave in the sea
    And you've traveled for longer
    You'll be further from me
    You know it will break me

    And when you shudder at night
    Because you feel me there
    And I'll be holding you in my dreams
    But one day you won't care
    You know it will break me

    And when you see me in pieces
    And you can't pull me together
    You try but you try too late
    And you know I'm under the weather
    It's because I'm already broken




    Submitted on 2008-07-13 03:43:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That's so pretty. I normally hate things that include the word 'broken,' but I decided to read this anyway, and I'm glad I did. I enjoy the calm sadness you wound through every line.
    I have nothing negative to say, so I guess I'll be on my way now.

    Very nicely done.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      This to me is a very sad write describing the pain involved in a Lost Love
    I too have felt this pain before and trust me my Friend I know just how painful it can be
    Look to the Lessons learned from this relationship to carry your Heart to a new relationship filled with Love
    Though your psyce may be broken my Friend there is no pain that can completely destroy your Heart
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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