dust on the dash by Celeste J. Bell

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Submission Name: dust on the dash dots

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Author:	Celeste J. Bell
ASL Info:	21/Lady/never-never land
Elite Ratio:	4.01 - 209/206/67
Words:	91

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	63
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	538

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dust on the dash dots

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I am static on the highway,
Just another blur to the children playing on their tire swings.
I am another unknown face speeding past,
My haste blowing the air through your clothes.

Together the cars move,
Some accidental ballet routine we all just
Happen to know the right moves to.
How ironic that we know nothing of each other.

I am static on the highway,
No one will see me
No one will remember me in this space in time.
How reassuring.

Submitted on 2008-07-13 22:04:33 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow, this made me think of a girl who was lying dying and about to be dead on the side of the road, it was very powerful. I'm going to read your other work!!!!
| Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by The Wolverine | [ Reply to This ]
  haha, as in the other piece, this kind of reminds me of my writing/thought process; I've at times also thought of writing on a similar topic. Very well done too, I really liked the whole second stanza, the idea of an "accidental ballet" among the individual cars/people on the road is just a great metaphor; the whole static on the highway idea is great as well. As with Herrick, I'm inspired to look at more of your work, well done.
| Posted on 2008-07-14 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]
  That puts driving into a new perspective... I can't really help you to improve this but I honestly can say that there is no need.

It is interesting though, that we are almost non existant when we are driving down a HWY or really any road... no one will remember..

Unless of course there is a bad accident. But I wish that on no one...

Good work. This just inspired me to look more into your work.
| Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by Herrick | [ Reply to This ]

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