YELLOW by Celeste J. Bell

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Submission Name: YELLOW dots

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Author:	Celeste J. Bell
ASL Info:	21/Lady/never-never land
Elite Ratio:	4.01 - 209/206/67
Words:	73

Class/Type:	Poetry/Happy
Total Views:	79
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	461

Description:
My attempt to tell you exactly how I feel right in this moment

YELLOW

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A heart set aflame
Bursting with yellow and blue light
Eager. Anxious.
With quick movements it journeys--
Beyond the body of a prison.

To the clouds, the stars, the end of the universe it flies uninhibited by life.
Invisible to the outside world-
Its owner smiled with pride

"finally" they would say, if words could form on chapped tongue
"we are free."

Submitted on 2008-07-13 22:44:33 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  Having read the poem twice, I am inclined to think the description captures the feeling of joy. Perhaps love has something to do with it. Whatever the moment, it is the sudden wellspring of elation one may experience for no particular reason at all.

You did a very competent job crafting this poem.
| Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
  So the heart and owner say "we are free", but did his heart literally leave his chest? is he free from his heart, or is his heart still with him and they are both free from something or someone?

This poem made me think! I love that! It made me ask questions, and I think you've done a good job here.

Please comment back, I don't have any
| Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by The Wolverine | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed reading this, just a nice, short, passionate piece. I liked all the imagery in the first stanza (betong supposed to be beyond?) and the little paradox in the second, flying to the edge of the universe yet is unseen throughout; and I can relate to the feeling. This actually reminded me a little bit of my own writing. Nice write, although I am a little confused as to the meaning of the quote at the end, but it's probably something just lost on me.
| Posted on 2008-07-14 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]

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