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    dots Submission Name: Die a little moredots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 17/47/39
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Another day has passed
    This emptyness has grown
    Anxiety is on full attack with nothing to do
    As I glance at the date with a worrysome look

    It's circled and marked in heavy ink
    She promised than, she'll be back again
    Everyone has their doubts
    They think what they want

    They carry on with their lives
    And they don't mention her name
    As if she never existed to begun with

    When I feel like I'm loosing it all
    In reality, they care less if she's gone
    And inside, Im slowly breaking down
    With each day to count, I die a little more inside

    On the outside, it's only a facade
    With my head held high and smile strong
    No one knows, I'm trying not to break
    When all I want to do is scream

    If they stop and try to understand
    They will strongly see, she keeps me sane
    With the suicidal thoughts having awaken

    I see her broken face over and over in my dreams
    And that razor blade, it went back in it's hiding place
    For another year or two till it sees sunlight once again

    Turning over and over in my twisted mind
    I came to the conclusion: my life is in her hand
    Of all that turned out, this can't be altered
    With my options limited, they stand there in their glory

    The day she fulfills her promise
    When all that had doubts will be proven wrong
    As I welcome her home with open arms
    My excitement that of a child's on Christmas Morning




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      Wow. That is amazingly beautiful. I have tried to put me dying a little more everyday into words and you did that very thing. Thank you for that insight.
    | Posted on 2008-09-22 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your poetry. Very understanding. You should read mine. JoJoCrab
    | Posted on 2008-07-14 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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