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    dots Submission Name: the water of your skindots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 683
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsthe water of your skindots
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    standard eye colours
    can be full of bad memories.
    thus we speak in tongues
    to cataglott
    eachother's smiles
    for the sake of love
    where the lips sound
    out our new names
    over new orleans
    where the milk spilled
    like god and cigarettes
    over proper flowers.

    it's well fit
    to believe
    in anything
    outside of a
    round understanding
    of a tall sky.
    i piece together our hands
    from discarded paper bins
    where we left our bodies
    in the rain.

    serious pleasures
    could find us sleeping
    if we only knew how.
    what's bled out
    in mirrors
    makes me live into
    the carpet
    where i found you.
    from here,
    your body
    reminds me of everything.

    i miss you
    though we've never really met.
    oh memory,
    i am your lost corona.
    i expect to find
    the water of your skin
    inside me
    where i'm changing,
    blissful,
    in the lost seconds
    of the endless night.




    Submitted on 2008-07-14 07:11:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my oh my this one of kind
    you hold me in a trance
    thats divine
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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