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    dots Submission Name: I Know I Dont Show Itdots
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    Author: BrokenAngelKat
    ASL Info:    18-F-NC
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 102/231/186
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Angst
    Total Views: 42
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    dotsI Know I Dont Show Itdots
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    But I'm shattered.
    Battered and fucking broken..!
    I have trust issues
    Because he killed me!
    The smile on my face is NEVER real!
    No matter how many times I say I'm OK.
    I try to dress bright and act happy
    Because the inside doesnt need to be shown.
    If it did I would look mutilated..
    With slashed up wrists
    And gashes over my heart..
    If I had one.

    My scars have healed.. On the outside.
    On the inside is a girl still raw
    Still bleeding..
    From the breakup.

    7 years and then she learned he fucked around.
    7 years to fall in love and have no one catch her.
    7 YEARS!!! FOR HIM TO RIP HER HEART TO PIECES!
    TO LEAVE HER BROKEN ON THE FLOOR!!
    GASPING FOR AIR!!
    SCREAMING FOR HELP!
    FOR SOLACE!
    FOR [[PEACE!]]

    She's all wrapped up in a pretty smile..
    But on the inside..
    She's practically screaming LOVE ME.. SAVE ME..
    Heal Me.




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      Very dramatic!! Bringing out the inner you. you should read mine
    | Posted on 2008-07-14 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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