AND THE TRUTH WILL STILL BE UNHEARD... by Inducted

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Author:	Inducted_Kitty
Elite Ratio:	4.3 - 307/422/109
Words:	214

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This is based on the ancient belief that the Sun is God, or God's 'Sun' (son).
The 12 steps (hours of daylight) lead to the 12 steps (hours of darkness, or night, which we call(sunSET).
The children are us, and the mother is our earth.
We are destroying our mother earth.
We cannot see the truth in the darkness, so the Sun, or God, will shine His light on us and force us to see the truth.

AND THE TRUTH WILL STILL BE UNHEARD... dots

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AND THE TRUTH WILL STILL BE UNHEARD…

The Mother falls under the weight of Her born

As the Dawn shines Its light on Her brow,

She looks up to the Sun, in the blue sea above

And She weeps with the sin we allow.

"Please help Me, My God

For I can’t carry on, when My Children have all but killed Me…"

And the Sun saw Her there, and reached out to Her pain

Saying,

"They know not the 'Truth' yet, to see…

When the 'Truthers' are given their platform,

And the Children all learn to believe –

They will lessen their burdon upon You,

And the ignorant then will conceive…

When My twelve steps are done, and I leave here,

Then Set will continue My Word –

And your Children, again will be blinded

And the Truth will still be unheard…

When Set has stepped twelve steps to daylight,

My promise, to You, I give now –

I will shine My light down on Your Children,

And, the Truth, They then all MUST allow."

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Are the twelve steps part of a program, like AA, and you are telling your readers when you kick the habit the 'truth' will still be unheard? Also, what or who is 'Set' referring to? I think this could be more enjoyable if there was some background to it.
| Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]
This to me is nebulous. Are you calling the sun(that star in the sky) a god? Or do you mean the Son (as the Son of God? ) Or are you comparing the light of the sun as to the light of God's Son ? The "twelve steps", are they The Apostles ? "The Set", I can't figure that one out. You leave your readers with consternation and disgust since there are no footnotes explaining what you mean.
The third stanza is superb. I can't figure out the mystique of "The twelve steps." Perhaps I need a little worm of thought to enter into your mental bend.
| Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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