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The Darkness

Author: BusterLILblock
ASL Info:    21/F
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Class/Type: Personal Quotes /Longing
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The Darkness

It was not the darkness that lurred me in,

it was the light that shunned me out.

Submitted on 2008-07-14 22:20:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  the innocent child searches the light
while the infidel child burns down the night

Just my thoughts regarding yours.

| Posted on 2010-06-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  To be worthy of light is the question your asking. Light is gifted not achieved, the life long struggle goes on.
| Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
  I know that! But I forgot...I remember you saying it...I can't believe I forgot what it've got to let a little hint to my brain...the door is closed. : (

It was not the darkness that lurred me in,
it was the light that shunned me out.

bad memory.
| Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]
  very koool.its nice on its wn or it could be a beginning of a short story/poem or wht evr u want it to be.

gud job buster.

stay gold.
| Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
  a great two liner. sound like a quote. keep writing. visit my page and read " Vision of my past"
| Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
  This could be the great start of a short story or poem. I think that if you played around with the idea long enough, you could have something really cool.

You could approach it from many different angles--vampires, ghouls, ghosts, the undead. Or you could make it something more about FEELING that way, and not so much BEING that way.

I don't know. I just thought I'd toss some thoughts your way. Feel free to ignore them haha!

| Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]

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