Im sorry to tell you this my Friend but this write could have been so much better
You started out Great but the repetivness of
So she closses her eyes and the word SCREAM being repeated so much really took away from the effect of the poem
Im not saying its bad Im just trying to offer some constructive criticism to really make this a powerful work
Please let me know if you rewrite it
I would Love to read it
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
This may not be as good as the first two works from you I read. However it is still some top-notch material. You have a gift that you must keep neutering and messaging to help it grow to its full potential. You must also be careful to not over do it and kill it. You wouldn't want to waste it and burn out early.
My interpretation: This girl has an imagination that literally takes her to different places, it's that powerful. I'm sorry that I can't understand most of it but it has definitely piqued my interest and I will be rereading it several more times.