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    dots Submission Name: Air Kissesdots
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    Author: PhalenSky
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Clarksville, MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 3/3/13
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    dotsAir Kissesdots
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    You make it seem as though I'm not there
    And every picture that you draw now doesn't have me
    And it doesn't help that you're getting so tall
    And pretty soon you won't even be here at all
    Now that's one hell of a blow to the heart
    The news goes crashing over
    Like a tide
    Isn't this music special?
    It leaves quite and impression
    The reality of this relation
    The reality of this situation
    This is crushing my world
    Now you're out of my life
    Baby you get an air kiss tonight
    And every other night after that
    This is blocking my air supply
    Boy does time fly
    I've recently tried this new expression
    It's a little something where I smile
    Too bad that it always fades after awhile
    Baby you get an air kiss tonight
    Baby you turned my whole life upside down
    You grew up so fast and I don't know how
    I was hoping that someday maybe you'd come and visit for awhile
    I was hoping that maybe I could get a glimpse of my lost child...




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