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    dots Submission Name: Folk Songdots

    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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       just wrote this at work out of boredom, i imagine it being sung like an old dylan song kind of.

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    dotsFolk Songdots

    The world ain't on your shoulders man
    give Atlas a call, 'cuz maybe he can
    pluck the planet off his back like a baseball
    and throw it with so much curve it's like a boomerang
    to put some positive spin on things

    think you got a shitty ride- but never lived through genocide?
    look through the wide lens for some perspective
    quit with all that introspection, you're not a doc
    or even a quack, so you don't know jack

    just wake up breathin' and that's all right
    fall asleep and repeat every single night
    when those blues come and hold you down
    leave your bags, just get outta town

    leave your sadness on the shelf
    the door is open but you gotta step through it yourself

    fall asleep and dream now that's all right
    you've made it through another night
    they told me that change comes from within
    well if you don't reach out to help someone else
    what the hell kind of world are we livin' in?

    Submitted on 2008-07-15 03:29:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it in the sense of a folk song, like the title is. I think the quirks and puns that run through this very well. I would of liked a more serious tone to it, it felt relaxed and haphazardly in nature, almost with a positive up tone. I... Well the more I read it the more I like it, it plays on the mind very well. All in all I think... I... I think I will add this to my fave list, I don't know there is something about it that I really like. I would work on the first stanza some, the basketball thing comes of a bit Corney. All in all good.

    | Posted on 2009-01-16 00:00:00 | by HisNameIsNoMore | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this alot. It's nice to see someone else on here that can actually write some good lyrics. Definitely would suggest turning this into a serious song. I would take a listen for sure.
    | Posted on 2008-07-30 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]

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