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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    She does't quite hit the floor,
    but it sure went out from under her feet
    OH SNAP!
    They just watch the faceless beauty dance
    until she was almost still, simply turning side to side
    The people left, and she spins slowly

    what a sight to see!
    this pale woman dancing eternally.
    like a marionette, she remains
    a few feet off the earth
    one man left to meet
    to measure her worth




    Submitted on 2008-07-15 03:31:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hola! Como estas usted?

    haha well thats about the extent of spanish that i know...so moving on..>_>

    "She [doesn't] quite hit the floor,
    but it sure went out from under her feet
    OH SNAP!
    They just watch the faceless beauty dance
    until she was almost still, simply turning side to side
    The people left, and she spins slowly"

    Uhm i have no clue what imagry you are trying for in all honesty. Marionettes? Some sort of wooden puppet? hahahahahah im so tired T.T can you explain this to me?

    "what a sight to see!
    this pale woman dancing eternally.
    like a marionette, she remains
    a few feet off the earth
    one man left to meet
    to measure her worth"

    HAHAHAHAHAHHAAH okay that's funny i critiqued that part before i saw this one and then i saw the marionette thing and i actually laughed

    but seriously i have no clue what you mean by this poem? my head's spinning cause i know it would sound amazingly beautiful if i could understand it. so if you can explain it to me i'll come back and redo this comment

    ~ Nikki
    | Posted on 2008-12-17 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      You just made my skin crawl. I LOVE THAT ABOUT YOU!

    This woman kills herself(or is hung intentionally), and who is she to us? Another three-liner in the last section of yesterday's news. You are brilliant.

    This poem is simply two parts for me. The first is life, or better: it's end. The second is death and what awaits.

    If ever there was a time that I felt like a blip, this is the epiphany to have. This life is one thing, but what comes after is something else entirely.

    You are fantastic, Wolverine. Please, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2008-12-16 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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