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    dots Submission Name: something you can keepdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    i would write
    an entirely new language
    into my skin
    to hear you breathe.
    you, who pass the hours
    of dread
    in the constant beauty
    that you are.

    away
    into the deep blue
    water of life
    where we're hidden,
    we could move
    everything
    with lucid fingers
    wrapped in thought.

    we could explain
    the snow of the wood
    with subtle whispers
    in the night
    & collapse
    into the deep wet memory
    of summer
    where we hush,
    lost in the cells
    & folding
    like two birds
    inside a jar.

    i never speak lightly
    of such things.
    the weight of my words
    is a motion of emotion
    in this world.
    & as my honeyed tongue
    collects yours into mine,
    i will find a way
    to split
    the fantasy from dream
    & leave you holding something
    you can keep...




    Submitted on 2008-07-15 09:41:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You speaking a true meaning on what you feel , the words are your actions that fits this oetry with excellence. great piece. Keep writing. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-19 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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