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    dots Submission Name: On the Webdots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    51/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1035/1330/360
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 45
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 578



    Description:
       An observation of Nature.


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    dotsOn the Webdots
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    Precision strands, deft hidden hands
    clasp firmly to their new found guest.
    This host demands a change in plans
    to feast upon the choice and best.

    Each honoree, for lunch, is free
    for this appointment few can break.
    For hours rapt, silk morsels trapped
    from spinning yarns protests won't shake.

    One stop, one bite, one prayer contrite
    bounce the bauble, teased in tangles.
    Well-hanged winner, dressed for dinner
    sipping each cocoon it strangles.


    The Gadfly




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