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    dots Submission Name: unluckydots

    Author: Beulah
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 588/414/44
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Isn't it strange how some patterns are repetitive and play out again and again and you feel powerless to stop it...

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    time bound sequence
    of unrhythmic love
    so unerringly accurate
    in providing refuge
    to my captive soul
    leaving gaping holes
    for remnants
    of yesteryear
    to gather

    Submitted on 2008-07-15 13:25:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how you express the theme in such a breif way. sometimes the short and simple poems say the most. keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by EileenToTheLeft | [ Reply to This ]
      There is that pathway in the mind that just gets walked over and over. You have to spill it, and eventually I think the memories do become sweeter, yes they do.

    And yet, I'm one to tell you, I wouldn't go back there for anything.

    Every word, every line is a anthem in crescendo. Brilliant!


    | Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      you showing what you believe in and that's good. putting a piece like this is great. the thoughts are more of you than ever. keep writing. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Baie goeie komposisie. Die inhoud laat my dink aan gelukkiger dae toe dit vol van vryheid was. “Gaping holes” vandag wat ons met die oorblyfsels van gister se goeie dinge probeer invul. I also experience such days.
    Amazing piece full of reminiscences of yesteryear. The past can live forever thought - if you will it! Very well written. Regards. Joachim.
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      Forgive me while I stumble towards coherent thought. Nine lines have me bewildered. I am truly amazed that in nine short lines you showed the circle you spoke of in your description.

    I suppose all I can muster is job well done.
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish that I could give an intelligent response to this, but the words I'm searching for do not show themselves to me. however, I really enjoyed the simplistic yet deep conveyance this showed me. I know that some people's writings mean different things to different people, but the more I read this, the same un-nerving truth keeps slapping me in the face. The imperfections that are a true constant in life, some you may not desire, subconsciously are the ones that you long for to the "fill the gaps" left from things not always fitting together. things are going to happen again and again, it's just how we deal with "things" that make the difference. Thanks for the good read.
    | Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]

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