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    dots Submission Name: Boogeymandots
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    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 609
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    dotsBoogeymandots
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    Shadows, shadows on the wall

    Slinking down across my bed

    Banches scrape across the house

    Scratching, etching through my head



    Laughing, laughing do I hear

    Breathing sharp, I try to scream

    Pull the covers up too close

    Teeth so sharp, I see them gleam



    Running, running down the hall

    Running into every wall

    No one hears me, all but it

    Getting closer as I fall



    Cornered, cornered, I slink down

    Cowering in my defeat

    Holding out my hands to pray

    Fearful of the fate I meet



    Broken, broken do I lay

    Knees pulled close upon the floor

    Dreaming of a safer place

    Secrets will I tell no more



    Whisper, whisper make no sound

    Touch the wounds upon my face

    Boogeyman lives down the hall

    Forever will she haunt this place


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    You can't see me anymore...




    Submitted on 2008-07-15 19:42:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Neat, nifty and extremely well done! Once again with an excellent command of rhyme and meter throughout (I have a few quibbles, but let them pass). Keep it up! bravo... bravo... bravo..
    | Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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