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    dots Submission Name: Seeking for Infinitydots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    19/M/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    6.81 - 151/121/104
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 55
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 443



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    dotsSeeking for Infinitydots
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    I am divided.

    My heart does not know
    completeness,
    nor does it seek to empty itself
    entirely
    into one river.

    See! How my life flows into
    the sea, how it is lost
    forever in the ocean of darkness!

    I am divided.

    I am the halfling,
    wandering,
    seeking for infinity.

    Infinity eludes me.
    Forever.





    Submitted on 2008-07-16 02:59:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      To me you are saying that there are those who seek for wholenes which in itself is infinity , yet,
    the void becomes even deeper since there is no recognition of having come to wholeness, since there is a deep desire to be which the person really isn't.
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      What I like about this is that you clearly state your poetical problem at the start, instead of dragging it on.

    The rest of your piece continues the thought process, clearly frustrated and a little content yet puzzled with the situation.

    Good job. I like. Much. :)
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by Raging Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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